Written slightly better than 4 but still with timeline discrepancies. I also don't understand how Polly and Sam didn't know who Sergi was right away. I mean, Polly I can kind of see since she only remembers her future from dreams. Sam should've known right away though. Anyway, the writing is still middle school, at best. A few sentences that stuck with me were: "He realized he was going to need more backup than he needed", "she walked into the darkness. It was dark", and "she realized he was going to be just fine, when she saw that look on his face, she knew he was going to be alright". I just have a hard time even seeing how an editor touched this. Still hanging in there for the rest of the story though.